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F84-5 t1_j29pv1x wrote
Reply to comment by Tommygunn504 in [EU] You, an ordinary person with a boring job, marry the love of your life... and unknowingly into a big crime family. You don't notice because you've always been socially awkward. Because of your apparently blasé attitude to tense situations, you've developed a reputation in the Underworld by MidgardWyrm
I think the level of detail is good, at least for this kind of format. I do think it would benefit from a few more scenes with dialog in place of plane narration, but I'm not a writer myself, so do with that as you wish.
F84-5 t1_j2813oc wrote
Reply to comment by Tommygunn504 in [EU] You, an ordinary person with a boring job, marry the love of your life... and unknowingly into a big crime family. You don't notice because you've always been socially awkward. Because of your apparently blasé attitude to tense situations, you've developed a reputation in the Underworld by MidgardWyrm
This is good. I think it could do with a bit more "show don't tell" but it's a solid outline.
F84-5 t1_j22zi5z wrote
Reply to comment by ApocalypseOwl in [WP] The alien invasion was defeated, and their spaceships reduced to rubble. The only thing putting a damper on things is the question of what should become of the millions of hostile, defeated extraterrestrials now stranded on Earth. by AccessTheMainframe
How pleasantly optimistic. I like it.
F84-5 t1_j1tnkl5 wrote
Reply to comment by turnaround0101 in [WP] You died and awoke in the afterlife. It's quite nice actually. The people and atmosphere are a lot nicer than you are used to and there is no stress or pressure. When you ask what good deed got you into heaven you are informed that this is hell, followed by a visit from a very concerned demon. by Kitty_Fuchs
Ah, nice to run across something of yours again. It's been a while. I'm happy to say your writing is still as evocative as ever.
F84-5 t1_je122lo wrote
Reply to comment by IAmOEreset in [WP] The SCP Foundation discover that, if we in this reality delete SCP-682 from the wiki, it will cease to exist, have never existed in the first place, and will not be able to counter or adapt to this. They attempt to contact us and tell us this information. by Bloodgulch-Idiot
Dear O5-1,
don't worry, the rules of the narrative dictate that 682 (or any other world ending anomaly) can never breach containment for long. If it did escape and wipe out everything there would be nothing left to write new articles about and that would just be boring. Short term breaches or disasterous termination attemps however are intresting, so I'm afraid the're likely to keep happening. Sorry about that.